jkelmcrosbhighsenior Posted September 29, 2010 Report Posted September 29, 2010 My name is Justin Aaron Kelm I am a graduate of Crosby High School and am a journalist and statistician. I write stories for the Crosby Cougars. I do independent stats as well.By: [b]Justin Aaron Kelm[/b]The Coogs came into the “Reservation†in Groves, Texas as they took on the Port Neches Indians sporting a 0-1 record, craving a win. The night was awful and the Coogs couldn’t get anything going the game kicked off and the PN-G Indians came out with a furry, these Indians wanted to scalp the Coogs. PN-G (1-1) basically wore down the smaller Cougars (0-2) and the gashes in Crosby's defense began to enlarge wider and wider after the Indians owned only a 10-0 halftime advantage. Honestly, everything about PN-G's second-half performance looked great, even though Crosby owned more first downs and total yards at halftime. Quarterback Brennan Doty for the Indians had the better night of two well-respected passers, completing 12 of 18 for 178 yards and four touchdowns. Crosby counterpart Dominic Merka was 14 of 33 for 193 yards and a score, but two interceptions. Here's the misleading aspect of Merka's night, though. The Crosby passer was 4 of 12 for 41 yards with two interceptions at the end of three quarters. The Indians had a 31-0 upper hand before the TCU pledge ever piled up his numbers. PN-G's defense did not try to suffocate Crosby by any means. The Indians linebackers and corners loosened the space at the line of scrimmage and allowed themselves a cushion to cope with Crosby's speed and Merka’s skills as a runner and thrower. Crosby ran for a net of 15 second-half yards at the same time that PN-G's offensive line was bringing out the hammer. PN-G's starting receivers showed good speed on this outing too. Amir Jalali grabbed five balls for 81 yards and two scores. Jayce Nelson looked like a faster version of Spencer DeRon, catching five for 58. Collin Gizzi had 2 for 39 and has seemed to be good for at least one big play night after night. Schexnider and Hunter Knox intercepted Merka who had two other disasters in the first half's final three minutes. A high snap sailed over punter Merka's head, setting up the Indians' first touchdown. Crosby answered back, moving from its 27 to PN-G's 21 in the half's final minute. Merka kept the ball on an apparent quarterback draw. Safety Tanner Jorgensen jarred the ball loose and end Christian Shetley claimed the free ball for PN-G on the Tribe's 14. The Coogs just couldn’t get anything going and all hell broke lose, but the only good thing on the night was when Merka connected with Wide Receiver Willie Hebert for a 41 yard jack, making the score 31-7 in favor of the Indians with 10:27 left in the 4th. After the Indians gave up the first score of the night, the Coogs defense couldn’t contain them; the Indians Brennan Doty had a 14-yard run and scored on the Coogs with 7:43 left in the game, making the Indians up 38-7 over the lonely Cougars. The Coogs couldn’t get anything going and the Indians just decided to run the ball till the final whistle. The Indians knocked off the Crosby Cougars, by a final score of 38-7.
PNGFan Posted September 30, 2010 Report Posted September 30, 2010 The Reservation is in Port Neches..
Tyrone_Biggums Posted September 30, 2010 Report Posted September 30, 2010 Paragraphs are both fun and useful.
Raider81 Posted September 30, 2010 Report Posted September 30, 2010 [quote name="Tyrone_Biggums" post="861402" timestamp="1285852163"]Paragraphs are both fun and useful.[/quote]As is punctuation.Seriously, if you truly wish to be a journalist, you not only need to pay attention to grammar and spelling, you need to develop your own style.This piece, while full of information, was poorly constructed and pretty boring. I'm not trying to be harsh, just providing constructive criticism.
hitman009 Posted September 30, 2010 Report Posted September 30, 2010 he could work for the beaumont enterprise right now... sports section sucks....
raideroldtimer Posted September 30, 2010 Report Posted September 30, 2010 [quote name="jkelmcrosbygraduate2010" post="861048" timestamp="1285802396"]My name is Justin Aaron Kelm I am a graduate of Crosby High School and am a journalist and statistician. I write stories for the Crosby Cougars. I do independent stats as well.By: [b]Justin Aaron Kelm[/b]The Coogs came into the “Reservation†in Groves, Texas as they took on the Port Neches Indians sporting a 0-1 record, craving a win. The night was awful and the Coogs couldn’t get anything going the game kicked off and the PN-G Indians came out with a furry, these Indians wanted to scalp the Coogs. PN-G (1-1) basically wore down the smaller Cougars (0-2) and the gashes in Crosby's defense began to enlarge wider and wider after the Indians owned only a 10-0 halftime advantage. Honestly, everything about PN-G's second-half performance looked great, even though Crosby owned more first downs and total yards at halftime. Quarterback Brennan Doty for the Indians had the better night of two well-respected passers, completing 12 of 18 for 178 yards and four touchdowns. Crosby counterpart Dominic Merka was 14 of 33 for 193 yards and a score, but two interceptions. Here's the misleading aspect of Merka's night, though. The Crosby passer was 4 of 12 for 41 yards with two interceptions at the end of three quarters. The Indians had a 31-0 upper hand before the TCU pledge ever piled up his numbers. PN-G's defense did not try to suffocate Crosby by any means. The Indians linebackers and corners loosened the space at the line of scrimmage and allowed themselves a cushion to cope with Crosby's speed and Merka’s skills as a runner and thrower. Crosby ran for a net of 15 second-half yards at the same time that PN-G's offensive line was bringing out the hammer. PN-G's starting receivers showed good speed on this outing too. Amir Jalali grabbed five balls for 81 yards and two scores. Jayce Nelson looked like a faster version of Spencer DeRon, catching five for 58. Collin Gizzi had 2 for 39 and has seemed to be good for at least one big play night after night. Schexnider and Hunter Knox intercepted Merka who had two other disasters in the first half's final three minutes. A high snap sailed over punter Merka's head, setting up the Indians' first touchdown. Crosby answered back, moving from its 27 to PN-G's 21 in the half's final minute. Merka kept the ball on an apparent quarterback draw. Safety Tanner Jorgensen jarred the ball loose and end Christian Shetley claimed the free ball for PN-G on the Tribe's 14. The Coogs just couldn’t get anything going and all heck broke lose, but the only good thing on the night was when Merka connected with Wide Receiver Willie Hebert for a 41 yard jack, making the score 31-7 in favor of the Indians with 10:27 left in the 4th. After the Indians gave up the first score of the night, the Coogs defense couldn’t contain them; the Indians Brennan Doty had a 14-yard run and scored on the Coogs with 7:43 left in the game, making the Indians up 38-7 over the lonely Cougars. The Coogs couldn’t get anything going and the Indians just decided to run the ball till the final whistle. The Indians knocked off the Crosby Cougars, by a final score of 38-7.[/quote]So the Indians came out with a furry that night? I shudder to ask what that is.....LOL :DThat's the only bad thing about spell checker, while it can correct spelling, it doesn't understand word usage as in [b]FURY[/b].
jkelmcrosbhighsenior Posted October 1, 2010 Author Report Posted October 1, 2010 [quote name="hitman009" post="861499" timestamp="1285861758"]he could work for the beaumont enterprise right now... sports section sucks.... [/quote]Thank you. I feel so great. I could care less what you have to say. You need to get a life because I really could care less about football in high school. I am done with high school and am in college. Thank you all for the criticism. Graduated 25 in my class of 300 at Crosby. Did Dual Credit Classes. I could careless about SETXsports or high school. I am done and could care less
Tyrone_Biggums Posted October 1, 2010 Report Posted October 1, 2010 [quote name="jkelmcrosbygraduate2010" post="861923" timestamp="1285893035"][quote author=hitman009 link=topic=73704.msg861499#msg861499 date=1285861758]he could work for the beaumont enterprise right now... sports section sucks.... [/quote]Thank you. I feel so great. I could care less what you have to say. You need to get a life because I really could care less about football in high school. I am done with high school and am in college. Thank you all for the criticism. Graduated 25 in my class of 300 at Crosby. Did Dual Credit Classes. I could careless about SETXsports or high school. I am done and could care less [/quote]Then why in the hell are you posting all of this? No need to get your feelings hurt.
Jackthehammer Posted October 1, 2010 Report Posted October 1, 2010 You are a bunch of idiots jumping on a young kid like that what the heck is wrong with you guys
Guest octfeb Posted October 1, 2010 Report Posted October 1, 2010 [quote name="jkelmcrosbygraduate2010" post="861923" timestamp="1285893035"][quote author=hitman009 link=topic=73704.msg861499#msg861499 date=1285861758]he could work for the beaumont enterprise right now... sports section sucks.... [/quote]Thank you. I feel so great. I could care less what you have to say. You need to get a life because I really could care less about football in high school. I am done with high school and am in college. Thank you all for the criticism. Graduated 25 in my class of 300 at Crosby. Did Dual Credit Classes. I could careless about SETXsports or high school. I am done and could care less [/quote] The poor kid could care less... care less, care less.....
HillGuy Posted October 1, 2010 Report Posted October 1, 2010 Actually, the proper phrasing is "COULDN'T care less", not COULD care less ;D Regardless...I am impressed that the young man hung everything out there, despite the critisism he was bound to take. Keep workin', Justin. What doesn't kill you, makes you stronger!
PNG Proud Posted October 1, 2010 Report Posted October 1, 2010 I thought the article was pretty thorough, although I never did any collegin' stuff. I liked it.DON'T LET THEM GET TO YOU COUGAR, AT YOUR AGE, MOST OF THESE CLOWNS COULDN'T EVEN WRITE A PARAGRAPH!
Jackthehammer Posted October 1, 2010 Report Posted October 1, 2010 Proud you are correct clowns is right. I hope this kiddo doesnt put down his pen and quit writing especially if he really love doing it. Shameful/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/
Tyrone_Biggums Posted October 1, 2010 Report Posted October 1, 2010 My only point was that paragraphs would've been useful. Surely that doesn't make me some type of shameless animal with no heart. Admit it, it would have been easier to read with a paragraph or five thrown in the mix. just sayin'To jkelm if you are a 14 year old doogie howser type in college, I apologize. If your serious about journalism, you are going to have to develop a thick skin because if everybody likes what you write, you won't have a job for very long.
Jackthehammer Posted October 1, 2010 Report Posted October 1, 2010 Forget about those people who na say you. Push on I enjoyed both of your reads.
Coach Schrapps Posted October 1, 2010 Report Posted October 1, 2010 [quote name="jkelmcrosbygraduate2010" post="861048" timestamp="1285802396"]My name is Justin Aaron Kelm I am a graduate of Crosby High School and [b]am a journalist[/b] and [b]statistician[/b]. I write stories for the Crosby Cougars. I do independent stats as well.By: [b]Justin Aaron Kelm[/b]The Coogs came into the “Reservation†in Groves, Texas as they took on the Port Neches Indians sporting a 0-1 record, craving a win. The night was awful and the Coogs couldn’t get anything going the game kicked off and the PN-G Indians came out with a furry, these Indians wanted to scalp the Coogs. PN-G (1-1) basically wore down the smaller Cougars (0-2) and the gashes in Crosby's defense began to enlarge wider and wider after the Indians owned only a 10-0 halftime advantage. Honestly, everything about PN-G's second-half performance looked great, even though Crosby owned more first downs and total yards at halftime. Quarterback Brennan Doty for the Indians had the better night of two well-respected passers, completing 12 of 18 for 178 yards and four touchdowns. Crosby counterpart Dominic Merka was 14 of 33 for 193 yards and a score, but two interceptions. Here's the misleading aspect of Merka's night, though. The Crosby passer was 4 of 12 for 41 yards with two interceptions at the end of three quarters. The Indians had a 31-0 upper hand before the TCU pledge ever piled up his numbers. PN-G's defense did not try to suffocate Crosby by any means. The Indians linebackers and corners loosened the space at the line of scrimmage and allowed themselves a cushion to cope with Crosby's speed and Merka’s skills as a runner and thrower. Crosby ran for a net of 15 second-half yards at the same time that PN-G's offensive line was bringing out the hammer. PN-G's starting receivers showed good speed on this outing too. Amir Jalali grabbed five balls for 81 yards and two scores. Jayce Nelson looked like a faster version of Spencer DeRon, catching five for 58. Collin Gizzi had 2 for 39 and has seemed to be good for at least one big play night after night. Schexnider and Hunter Knox intercepted Merka who had two other disasters in the first half's final three minutes. A high snap sailed over punter Merka's head, setting up the Indians' first touchdown. Crosby answered back, moving from its 27 to PN-G's 21 in the half's final minute. Merka kept the ball on an apparent quarterback draw. Safety Tanner Jorgensen jarred the ball loose and end Christian Shetley claimed the free ball for PN-G on the Tribe's 14. The Coogs just couldn’t get anything going and all heck broke lose, but the only good thing on the night was when Merka connected with Wide Receiver Willie Hebert for a 41 yard jack, making the score 31-7 in favor of the Indians with 10:27 left in the 4th. After the Indians gave up the first score of the night, the Coogs defense couldn’t contain them; the Indians Brennan Doty had a 14-yard run and scored on the Coogs with 7:43 left in the game, making the Indians up 38-7 over the lonely Cougars. The Coogs couldn’t get anything going and the Indians just decided to run the ball till the final whistle. The Indians knocked off the Crosby Cougars, by a final score of 38-7.[/quote]He never came on here and said I am a college kid. HE portrayed himself as a journalist, so if you are going to say you are a journalist be prepared to take criticism. Don't lie about your credentials next time...and a statistician? I play Madden that doesn't make me an offensive coordinator.
pngfan1 Posted October 1, 2010 Report Posted October 1, 2010 [quote name="Jackthehammer" post="861936" timestamp="1285893655"] You are a bunch of idiots jumping on a young kid like that what the heck is wrong with you guys[/quote]Kind of what I was thinking.
dayton Posted October 1, 2010 Report Posted October 1, 2010 [quote name="pngfan1" post="862313" timestamp="1285934804"][quote author=Jackthehammer link=topic=73704.msg861936#msg861936 date=1285893655] You are a bunch of idiots jumping on a young kid like that what the heck is wrong with you guys[/quote]Kind of what I was thinking. [/quote]there are a ton of 19 year olds ... or younger on this site, that take this kind of heat all the time even without posting something they wrote. It's a public forum... :-\
UTfanatic Posted October 1, 2010 Report Posted October 1, 2010 [quote name="PNGFan" post="861190" timestamp="1285808402"]The Reservation is in Port Neches..[/quote]Ain't if funny to see how fast png fans want to drop Groves.Everyone say Port Neches................nobody ever say port neches groveskinda make you wonder ???
PNG Proud Posted October 1, 2010 Report Posted October 1, 2010 [quote name="bulldogbacker" post="862327" timestamp="1285935815"][quote author=PNGFan link=topic=73704.msg861190#msg861190 date=1285808402]The Reservation is in Port Neches..[/quote]Ain't if funny to see how fast png fans want to drop Groves.Everyone say Port Neches................nobody ever say port neches groveskinda make you wonder ???[/quote]BECAUSE.......Pay attention now, you may need to know this later.....The Reservation, which is PNG's stadium, IS IN PORT NECHES!Groves is a totally separate town, and it would be really hard to have a stadium in 2 different towns. OK, are we clear now?
Bucky Posted October 1, 2010 Report Posted October 1, 2010 But I Heard All the Players comes from "THE GROVES" ;D
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